PASSAGE 1, PAGE 5
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THE PROBLEM
Sample problem. Placeholder text naming what the passage is doing wrong.

AS WRITTEN
SAMPLE ORIGINAL PASSAGE
Placeholder lines standing in for the writer's own text.
Nothing here is taken from a real screenplay.

REWRITTEN
SAMPLE REWRITE
Placeholder lines showing the shape of the suggested version.
Still placeholder text.

WHY IT PLAYS BETTER
Sample rationale. Placeholder text explaining why the second version plays better.


PASSAGE 2, PAGE 19
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THE PROBLEM
Sample problem. Placeholder text naming what the passage is doing wrong.

AS WRITTEN
SAMPLE ORIGINAL PASSAGE
Placeholder lines standing in for the writer's own text.
Nothing here is taken from a real screenplay.

REWRITTEN
SAMPLE REWRITE
Placeholder lines showing the shape of the suggested version.
Still placeholder text.

WHY IT PLAYS BETTER
Sample rationale. Placeholder text explaining why the second version plays better.


PASSAGE 3, PAGE 32
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THE PROBLEM
Sample problem. Placeholder text naming what the passage is doing wrong.

AS WRITTEN
SAMPLE ORIGINAL PASSAGE
Placeholder lines standing in for the writer's own text.
Nothing here is taken from a real screenplay.

REWRITTEN
SAMPLE REWRITE
Placeholder lines showing the shape of the suggested version.
Still placeholder text.

WHY IT PLAYS BETTER
Sample rationale. Placeholder text explaining why the second version plays better.
